Wednesday, February 7, 2007

Romeo's Journal

While all secret loves be made public
Let all who have found love of my tribe,
And he who has never lov'd, declare how toxic
But who can ever tame love's growing ferns,
Or hold a trend of thought in her arms?

Their horses raced by as we made love.
We are wild, my pursuers and I
I-- of passion, they-- my demise strove
And I, one step ahead; They, two behind;
Montages and Copulates alike blind.

Peace sleeps where Jules lay.
No chase tonite, no need to run.
How long till I lose her, how long till I pay?

Copyright © macalurs 2007

12 comments:

Nilla said...

Romeo's Journal ehn....

Fascinating.

I'm impressed. I await Juliet's memoirs....lol

azuka said...

Romeo...

I'd love to be Romeo - without the dying...

iGwatala said...

Mack, great one. Will Shakespeare not turn now to wonder if he had actually left some verses unwritten, to now be discovered by your black hand?

Elle said...

poor romeo...

snazzy said...

I liked the concept but I found the imagery cloudy. I also couldn't decide whether that was the intended effect or not.

mack said...

@nilla,

I might write just that.. maybe not next

Azuka,

Romeo Must Die

@IGWTL

Thanks.

@Elle

:(

Snazzy,
Good having your 'Critic' cologne around here. The imagery was cloudy. I didn't intend to create any. I just wanted to write about romeo, without the "all romance" atmostphere like he was depicted. I felt like painting romeo to kind of enjoy his adventures, and to some extent enjoy the controversy.

iGwatala said...

Here's Babel of your last verse ENG-FRENCH-GERMAN-ENG:

Peace sleep where configuration of Jules. No tonite by hunt to run no necessity. How much time, until I lose it, how much time, until I pay?

Jaycee said...

Romeo and Juliet...

Having a partner can make your heart ascend to your mouth...but there are ways to go about it, there are ways to rule fear completely off ur mind. By sticking to certain principles of God...

"Shakespeare reincarnated" (I'll keep re-emphasizing that phrase)...lovely...

mack said...

@gwtl,

That is hilarious. "Peace sleep where cofiguration of Jules"!!!??? talk about intended meaning lost in translation!

@jaycee,

Thanks for stoping by. I would have lov'd it if we (u and I) could have had a 1 on 1 with Romeo and juliet. Too bad, they're almost too fictituous to be learned from... lol.
Same mistakes do happen, both with teenagers or preachers alike, where reason is over-ruled by instinct. Good point JC.

Daddy's said...

Love your writing style - very distinctive - makes me want more and more. Keep it coming.

Anonymous said...

Please take it easy!

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